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>> Anonymous
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It was based on this.
>> Anonymous
Why?
>> Anonymous
>>211654
Why not?

I think it's a good try. My only real problem with it is the lighting. OP should have lit her from her left, it looks weird how her hair covers her eye and part of her face where the light is coming from.
>> Anonymous
Graphic Designerfag here.
You fail.
Needs moar retouching. Seriously. Have you SEEN a women's magazine cover?
Lighting is too harsh. Tone down the hair, it's too harsh.
Title goes behind the picture noob, again, LOOK at an actually cover.
+ Fail for using that lurid pink for text. It blends into her hair, usually it's a few shades darker.
The picture honestly looks like it's been dropped in there with nothing done to it. It doesn't /fit'.
>> Anonymous
>>211677
art director fag here, and i fully agree with you.. but at the same time he will hopefully learn something of it and the next time he tries it will be (alot) better.
>> Anonymous
>>211677
Look at the sample ELLE cover with Lindsay Lohan. One of the L's is IN FRONT of her. That is what I was trying to do.
>> Anonymous
>>211677
Wow. You totally missed the cover the OP was using as inspiration didn't you?
>> Anonymous
>>211677
>Lighting is too harsh. Tone down the hair, it's too harsh.
It started out as a straight portrait and wasn't intended to be a fake magazine cover. That's why I had a backlighting flash behind her head. So she looks hot.

>+ Fail for using that lurid pink for text. It blends into her hair, usually it's a few shades darker.
I tried my best. The problem is her hair goes from dark red to very light red. I couldn't find a shade of red for the ELLE letters that didn't blend in somehow with her hair, and I ended up choosing that shade.

thanks though.
>> Anonymous
>>211677
>>211679
Wow, even with that big-ticket title you sucked your dads' dicks to get, you still don't know how to read and process data. What a joke the art and design world is becoming.
>> Anonymous
It's good, you need some touch-up on your typography choices, and the pose is a little unfitting, but overall very good job for someone just giving a crack at it.
>> Anonymous
>>211692
whatever, they probably just do shitty layouts for their school newspapers or something. forget about it.

doesn't change the fact that it sucks.
>> Anonymous
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>>211680
>>211682
>> Anonymous
>>211704
Not samefag, just hivemind.
>> Anonymous
Title text doesn't match, neither does the size. Girl needs to be far more retouched and text color choices should be more gold than red, just as a matter of contrast.
>> Anonymous
Oh, and also, try to get something more interesting going on with your model. See how the pro one is actually something other than her just standing there?

How well do you know your model? If you want to start attempting portraits, glamor, or fashion photography, start with someone you're closer and more comfortable with like a girlfriend or sister. Then as you get her to loosen up, shoot her doing goofy things.

The hip-pop to the side is nice, but that's the only interesting thing in your model direction. Throw in some flair, get sexy, give her an emotion to convey, maybe throw in a prop. Props don't have to be something not already in the frame, notice how Lohan used her dress almost as if it was a prop? Maybe the same pose but with her pulling the jacket wide open as if showing off her boobs. Trust me, it's not as explicit as it sounds. Also remember that the hands are expressive and should be doing something. It helps keep the photo from looking less posed and more interesting.
>> Anonymous
>>211714
How would you retouch her? Her skin is smooth already with no wrinkles and no blemishes.
>> Anonymous
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What was the mood like during this shooting? Something tells me she was fairly comfortable but you were a little uptight. You were afraid to experiment a little and giving her some direction. You're the photographer. It's more your job to tell her how to pose or what to do than hers. She doesn't have a clue what you want or how you want it to look. Photography's real easy when you're just snapping a photo, but the creativity is tough. I'm already coming up with a ton of ideas for this. You need to sit and actually think, "What can I do to make this interesting?" Have her kick off her shoes and walk around holding them, have her take off her jacket, and throw it over her shoulder, watch her play with her hair through the camera, tell her to sit somewhere while you grab another lens and then go hide and snap her with a telephoto, make her go running through the environment and snap away, find something for her to interact with, get her to lay down on her back but pose as if she's standing and shoot her from straight above, see if she knows how to do a handstand, make her tell a funny joke while you hold down the shutter, surprise her and snap a photo real fast, make her walk away from you and then call her name without her expecting it and snap her turning.
>> Anonymous
>>211718
Weird neck + lighting on face looks odd and uneven in parts.
>> deleted
This has nothing to do with photography. The photo is as it is, the rest is layout and typography, a design task.
>> Anonymous
Are those cromabs around her fingertips?
>> Anonymous
>>211729
no
>> Anonymous
>>211729
OP here. Not chromatic aberration. It's a glow that came about when I increased the red channel saturation to get her hair to really pop out. Sorry, should have fixed that.
>> Anonymous
>>211719
Thanks for the feedback. The model was a friend of a friend. And you're right, I wasn't giving much direction. The only I said was "Look sexier! No, sexier, you're going the wrong direction away from sexy!" So basically I had no idea what to say. I didn't want to offend her by making her do anything crazy. Or saying something like "push out your chest a little."
>> Anonymous
>>211746
Try being more subtle.