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comic!

Oekaki post(Time: 3 min, Painter: Shi-Painter Normal, Animation:View)
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comments PLEASE! tell me I suck
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>>168686
ok...
Seems like you can draw better as all these are under a few minutes each, so I feel that you can definitely whip out something decent if you took the time.

But the story was linear... no real oomph. Was expecting a funny punch line after the... punch and was disappointed.

A comic can emphasize the flow of its story just with its panel layout. Maybe incorpoerate more into your next comic, only had a few minutes to think about it so here is what I can come up with, I'm sure you can come up with something better.
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>>168663
Young girl, there's no need to feel down.
I said, young girl, pick yourself off the ground.
I said, young girl, 'cause you're in a new town
There's no need to be unhappy.

Young girl, there's a place you can go.
I said, young girl, when you're short on your dough.
You can stay there, and I'm sure you will find
Many ways to have a good time.

It's fun to stay at the y-g-c-a.
It's fun to stay at the y-g-c-a.

etc etc.

first thought at OP pic.
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moar
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>>168715

Heart
underwear!