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Anonymous
>>1180036 Punctuation and proper use of commas help along the pacing. Look: >Its because blacks and othe minorities, hell even whites do this, its because they identify with their race the develop this bullshit sense of pride, most of the time pride isnt a problem, its a motivator, and reason to continue, but when you put that in the hands of uneducated, a person who hasnt developed the logic and reasoning parts of their brains, they attach the pride to the emotion center, and act on emotion alone, this leads to the brain slowly melting into mush. Your punctuation implies that was all one great run-sentence. See, it's just like in reality when you try to spew out a huge trail of words and by the end of it you're out of breath. That's how the reader feels at the end. >It's because blacks, other minorities, and hell, even whites identify with their race the develop this bullshit sense of pride. Most of the time pride isn't a problem, it's a motivator and reason to continue. But when you put that in the hands of the uneducated, people who haven't developed the logic and reasoning parts of their brains, they attach that pride to their emotional center, and act on emotion alone. This leads to the brain slowly melting into mush.
It's not perfect, but I think it's better.
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