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Anonymous
I drew some Lunar porn because I have never found any Lunar porn that is good and that makes me unhappy.
>> Anonymous
1) Ears are a tad bit high, wouldn't you say?
2) She's got a relatively short neck, wouldn't you say?
3) One thigh seems bigger than the other, wouldn't you say?
4) It's not really porn if it's drawn, wouldn't you say?
5) Saged, wouldn't you say?
>> Anonymous
>>147698
Dang, that was prompt, harsh, and really unnecessary. I wouldn't mind seeing more original content, especially of this quality, and shit like that drives it away.
>> Anonymous
>>147698
You are an asshat, wouldn't you say?
>> Mayor Mike Haggar !Oq/9NMk1yg
>>147698

This shows talent, you Mad Gear punk. It's not without flaws, but you don't have to be a goddamn dirtbag about it. I will slam you into a car so hard you'll be picking engine block out of your ass for a week.
>> Anonymous
>>147698

Troll must die.

OP: You win for not forgetting to draw the stripes on her cheeks. Draw Xenobia and Royce with their full body tats and you will win all the intarwebs
>> Anonymous
This is pretty damn good, well done.
Small nitpicks:
The stomach is a little too wide, resulting in a somewhat manly looking body. A slight hourglass figure would help considerably.
Left breast needs a little more angle away from the camera, especially the nipple.

Really, they're small criticisms and you've done very well. Great subject matter too.

Keep up the good work!
>> Anonymous
don't call your own image "jessicafaggotry". jeez.

I'll keep my mouth shut about the details and sum it up by saying that this drawing is still average. but who knows, practice makes perfect.

now draw some more, bitch.
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>>147698
>> Anonymous
What>>147698did is what's called a critique. And it was helpful. Soooo, if the OP feels offended by this and gets scared away by one critique, they should just stop practicing art altogether. I swear, you people act like all he said was "SHIT SUCKS FAG".

There's other issues, though, that>>147698missed. You have the rib cage start curving INWARD up around the shoulder area, it doesn't do that. Her right arm is too long, and her left arm is the same. You also messed up on the perspective so now it appears that her upper arm is incredibly short on her left arm. Her ass is drooping down on her leg, and is actually in more than the small of her back.

Pretty much, just start drawing realism and studying anatomy so that you have good anatomy in your drawings. Your anatomy needs to be tip-top if you're going to draw good hentai/ecchi, because there's nothing that you can use to hide your anatomical flaws.
>> Anonymous
if you want a place to go that has a moderately nicer community and gives actual contructive criticism and praise where it is due, then look no further than deviantART!
>> Anonymous
>>147794
Never, EVER suggest DeviantArt to ANYONE for constructive criticism. DO NOT EVEN JOKE ABOUT IT!

D:<
>> Anonymous
Man, tearing apart perfectly fappable ecchi. Who made you the goddamn art teacher?
If you critize every single nuance of someone's drawing without appreciating and prasing the ability they already have, no wonder no one is gonna want to post here.
You people would have a field day on deviant art, that place has a load of really crap artists there (Their art looks like it was drawn by preschoolers).
>> Anonymous
>>147795
>Never, EVER suggest DeviantArt

The statement was complete right there.
>> Anonymous
By crap artists, I'm guessing you mean http://rajee.deviantart.com/ and http://tickle212005.deviantart.com/ ?
>> Anonymous
This is not /ic/. Do not expect constructive or even rational criticism when you post your work in /e/.
>> Anonymous
>>147801
NO! YOU'VE OPENED THE FLOODGATES! THEY WON'T BE ABLE TO TAKE THE STRAIN!!
>> Anonymous
>>147796
That wasn't a "tearing apart." I just pointed out the anatomical flaws for them. And the reason I'd critique something like THIS rather than critiqueing on DeviantArt is that it at least shows /some/ merit.

And this isn't fappable. Once it becomes closer to anatomically correct, THEN we can talk.
>> Anonymous
>>147802
That was constructive AND rational.
>> Anonymous
How to tell if your artwork is crap on boards outside of /ic:

1.When posting, don't say that you drew it. See what kind of reaction you get. People will immediately ridicule a piece of artwork if they know that an amateur drew it, no matter the quality of the work.

2.See what kind of reaction you get. If you get negative comments, you're not up to the standards of the board, so you're probably better off remaining in /ic.
>> Anonymous
Totally agreed with>>147698. "asshat"? "harsh"? "goddamn dirtbag"? Do people frequently insult your mother or something and you're just THAT FUCKING DEFENSIVE? Jesus, how many times does half of /e/ gang up on some idiot who posts a few /u/ pictures? The flaming the bare feet threads? The "This chick is loli because she has no D-cup size bewbs!"? But about art drawn by your fellow 4channer, you get all "Don't point out flaws cuz that'd be rude"? Even if the comment is well constructed?>>147698got more shit thrown at him by you people than his comment was worth. Would this even be an issue if it were drawn by a Japanese artist? No, because you'd all feel free to insult them and say what you really think because they're probably not going to reply to you.

WHAT THE MASS NAKED CHILD EVENTS, YOU GUYS? I THOUGHT 4CHAN HAD BALLS.
>> Anonymous
I think drawings like this shouldn't be posted on /e on the principle that it always devolves into a flame war about how shitty the drawing is. But then again there is the occasional amature artist worthy enough to post their stuff in /e. The caveat is that the artist must be self-aware of whether their artwork meets the standards of /e, but most amature artists lack this kind of insight.
>> SHITTY ARTWORK Anonymous
Looks like it was drawn by a 13 yr old who just discovered that women have tits...
>> Anonymous
>>147815
STFU, it's nowhere NEAR shitty. I've seen much better, but it's not that bad.
>> Anonymous
>>147817
No you STFU, this is crap. I could draw better with a pencil in my ass.
>> Anonymous
>>147818
Why don't you go ahead and show us, then?
>> Anonymous
>>147821

I would but your dick is already in my ass
>> Anonymous
>>147822
That's impossible, there's no more room with your head lodged so far in
>> Anonymous
>>147830

Sure there's room, my arse is the size of china, and it's swallowing you whole. You know you like being inside my smelly ass
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>>147831
>>147830
>>147822
>>147821
>>147818
>>147817
>>147815
same person

ruining a perfectly good pointless argument thread with some random ecchi
>> Anonymous
Damn it this is the "ecchi" forum, not the "venting teenage angst" forum. Stop whining, children.
>> Anonymous
It's not bad, but it belongs in /ic/
>> age Anonymous
>>147906

Looks like shit, belongs in /ic
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Learn 2 draw your own porn.
>> Anonymous
>>147920

...almost good. Nice face, shaky pencils. Still belongs in /ic imo
>> Anonymous
What is /ic?
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>>147697
The back of the ribcage, behind the right arm, does curve towards the body a bit too much(keep the curve off). The left breast should face away more, and the left leg is missing the back line.
Otherwise, It's beautiful. How long did it take you to draw?
>> Anonymous
>>147939
lurk moar, nub
>> Anonymous
Looks like a body of a guy with tits drawn on. Learn female anatomy.
>> Anonymous
nice drawing
Here's an idea for this post: move on... Any other lunar pics that are post-worthy?
>> Anonymous
>>147792

I don't have a problem with critique. Several of your points about anatomy are right on the spot, but several of them aren't, too.

The only Lunar porn I've found looks like a 3rd grader did it, so I sketched something out quickly to see if I could do any better.
>> Anonymous
>>147939

A miserable pile of secrets?
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There was this doujin.. the only Lunar related hentai I have
>> Anonymous
Yeah, the Dark Althena doujin can be found at ezmanga. It's pretty bad, really, but it's interesting because the art looks really, really, really much like Yoshiyuki Sadamoto. Now why the heck would anyone draw a Lunar doujinshi with an art style like Sadamoto's, unless you were Sadamoto? Hmm...
>> Anonymous
>>148043
>The only Lunar porn I've found looks like a 3rd grader did it, so I sketched something out quickly to see if I could do any better.

Congratulations! This looks like the work of a 7th grader!
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Me good at draw.
>> Anonymous
>>147851
Actually, no.

>>147817
>>147830
Same Person. Me. The others were not me.