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Fuyuwa Kotatsu - Another Side Anonymous
Read this story two nights ago. It was okay, but I felt that the author toyed with us. You'll see why in a second.

Genres: supernatural (demons), impregnation, sex enslavement
Source: Slave Heroines Volume 1
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The story is about two sisters, Rachael and Alice, who are separated from one another as they flee from demons besieging their village. Her father slain, her mother raped, her sister disappeared without a trace, Rachael finds her alone in the world. Raised by the Church she grows up to become a professional exorcist, vowing to one day find her sister.
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When Rachael does find Alice, she is shocked to discover that Alice has been transformed into a demoness.
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Alice's master Xanadu appears, asking Alice to refrain from killing her sister. In return, he will grant her one request.
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So Alice begs her master to fuck her.
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Rachael pleads for Alice to open her eyes and return to her true self, but Alice informs Rachael that "this is the real me" as she squirms and moans with pleasure. Alice begs Xana-sama to let her bear another one of his children and he grants her request.
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Finished with Alice, Xanadu's attention returns to Rachael.
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Xanadu remarks that Rachael's vagina is just like her younger sister's: squirming about from the pleasure inside, Rachael is actually the one who's not letting go of Xanadu's dick. He notices that she looks like she is suffering but reassures her that the fun starts now.
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Is that all?
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Rachael asks herself why her body is getting turned on even though she's being raped. Alice, jealous of the pleasure her sister seems to be experiencing, decides to budge in and get a piece of the action herself.
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(From here on out, the story is pretty much a cocktease. I'll address this once we reach the end.)

Alice couldn't help but be turned on by the aroused look on her sister's face and proceeds to nibble on her breasts.
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Rachael climaxes and asks herself why. Alice laughs with delight and continues to make love to her sister, commenting that even when Rachael's face after she cums is pretty. Rachael meanwhile continues to outwardly resist, showing no signs of breaking.
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Retarded page. Alice asks Xana-sama to fuck both sisters at once. Useless cliché.
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Especially retarded because we already quit with the ménage à trois and move on to impregnating Rachael.

Xanadu explains to Rachael that from now on the entire reason for her existence, like her sister Alice, will be to give birth to demon children. Rachael freaks, Alice assures her that it's okay (1) because she's already had plenty of Xana-sama's kids and (2) because she's sure Rachael will give birth to a healthy child, and Rachael freaks some more.
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This page is a TOTAL COCKTEASE. Alice says that Rachael's going to become a slutty sex slave just like her. That's a lie. Xanadu says that Rachael's body is going to become a demon's, just like Alice's. That's also a lie. Would have been hot if it hadn't been a lie, but it is, so fuck.
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It's as if the Comic Book Guy reviewed hentai.

I like it!
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Even now, Rachael still begs Xanadu not to impregnate her.
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Rachael screams (or maybe it's still internal monologue), "This is so wrong, and yet why? I'm coming!"

Alice whispers to her sister, "With this, you're just like me now, Onee-chan. You can never return. We'll be together forever from now on, Onee-chan."

Okay. Yeah. Might have been a nice setup for Rachael's descent into darkness, right? We're gonna flip the page and see a Rachael who looks just like Alice, right? Right?
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WRONG! Many moons later, Xanadu enters one of the castle chambers to check up on how Alice and Rachael are doing. Rachael is in the process of giving birth to a disgusting demon. She's still human. She doesn't even look like she's enjoying it. All she does is moan (which could just be birthing pains for Christ's sake) and then say that the "baby" is being born. Xanadu chuckles and says "You really are sisters with a good relationship." The End.

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... Excuse me? You didn't-- yeah, you did. You totally did. Comments in the next reply.
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My boner is gone.
>> Anonymous
Okay, so let's get one thing straight: I liked this story and I figured some of you might like it too (or else I wouldn't have wasted my time and yours uploading this). But the story isn't great. Here are some of the main reasons why:

1. Rachael's internal monologue suggests she's getting aroused and achieving orgasms almost right from the start, but she never outwardly shows it. And I do mean never. Even on the last page her face is ambiguously drawn (is she orgasming? is she in distress?) and nothing she says clarifies whether or not her heart has been corrupted by Xanadu or if she is simply his eternal human prisoner and her heart remains pure. Sure, you could point to the pages where she moans or says things like "I'm cumming!" but that doesn't count. Not really. You wanna know why? Because that's just (in the hand-wavey world of hentai) a woman's natural physiologic response to getting fucked. Hentai would have us believe that ALL women get turned on, whether they want to or not, when they have anyone fondling their genitals, never mind fucking them hardcore. So pointing to physically-induced moaning doesn't convince me. To convince me that Rachael succumbed to the carnal pleasure, I needed to see some proof. A smile, maybe? How about some internal monologue confirming that she's fallen? Would have been real nice to see her transform but we'll get to that in a second.

The point is, this sort of wishy-washy ambiguity pisses me off. Next!
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2. I'm a fan of corruption stories. In the sense of the word where human girls becoming witches or monstergirls or demons or succubi, that sort of thing. So I was pretty fucking disappointed by the fact that Rachael never becomes part-demon like her sister. Not only because the moment we have demons in any story the possibility is there, not only because the author established precedent via Alice's own transformation, but because he fucking promised it would happen! Look! There! On Page 173! ????????????? ... grrr! Next.

3. The issue of the girls' mother is never addressed. Why would the demons kill her after they raped her but then decide to keep the daughters alive for all eternity? It doesn't make sense: either kill them all after you rape them or keep them all to birth your demon spawn. And so if they didn't kill the mother, then let's see her! Let's see some demon queen action going on or something! That would have been nice! God dammit. Last but not least ...

4. Alice can best be described as insane. She is a nymphomaniac pure and simple. She doesn't care about Rachael so much as she cares about Rachael's body. Her sisterly affectionate words never held much sway for me because they didn't seem sincere. Alice was single-mindedly focused on being pleased herself; her sister may as well have been her childhood friend or even some stray woman who entered Castle Xanadu. That completely kills any hotness that the two girls being sisters might have had.
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Anyway, enough tl;dr . For those who are interested, here's the cover of the source. Happy hunting.
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>>966392
"gee! i are seeing teh hoog walls of text. i make funey commetn kbai."

Wit 101 is right down the hall.
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>>966391
3.) Could be explained by the fact that the mother wasn't a virgin (obviously) and thus couldn't be transformed.
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>>966400
I thought of that but rejected as a perfectly good waste of a demon MILF just for the sake of trying to be "logical" about an illogical topic like demons. You're probably right, though, that this is what the author had in mind. Still ... what a waste!
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>>966391

keep reviewing it turns me on more than the images
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>>966405
Well that's one way to get me to shut up, lol.
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>>966382
>>966391
this is type of interpretation is kinda new and refreshing. almost as good as the doujin translated. GG, anon!
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can't find this on rs
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Reading this in comic book guys voice made this hilarious
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>>968130
HAHA OH WOW
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>>966366
Worst. Episode. Ever?
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>>966391

It's a hentai. What did you expect? Academy Award winning material? But i do agree with you on complaint number 2. It's a big boner killer in the corruption genre of hentai.
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>>968027
At 115 megs, I'm reluctant to upload it to RS, especially when there's a healthy torrent less than 2 months old.

http://www.hongfire.com/forum/showthread.php?t=84805

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>>968130
Heh, my syntax doesn't really match his so the illusion dies for me pretty quickly, but if you can get it to work in your head then more power to you.

>>968580
>It's a hentai. What did you expect? Academy Award winning material?
Actually, yes.

But seriously, if you couldn't already tell I'm the kind of guy who values his plot just as much as his pictures. People who can't understand what's being said in hentai don't know what they're missing and I'm so glad for them that the amount of translated hentai today is several orders of magnitude greater than it was when I first started downloading hentai myself not even a full decade ago. A well-written very erotic story can turn a silver medalist doujin (by art) into a gold medalist, and vice versa an unbelievably shitty story (such as this) can take a silver medalist and turn it into a bronze. Stories are powerful stuff! And the best hentais have both great art and great story.
>> Anonymous
wow you can read Japanese? Even so fuck the plot in hentai. They do add a bit of sexiness but still fuck it
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>>968775
Envy is an ugly thing.

Besides, if a good plot only added "a bit" of pleasure, do you honestly think people would froth at the mouth over translations? The fact that people are willing to pay hundreds of dollars to get translated hentai at the very least proves that we've got some plot-loving maniacs with deep pockets out there; but the additional fact that these commissions always generate 50+ thank yous suggests a much greater audience.
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I did not expect this type of thread to ever appear on /d/ let alone 4chan,i applaud you anon.
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Anon, do another one. This was fun.
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>>968809et al
What did you guys like about it? Maybe it's better if you don't say so I won't be able to consciously force myself into doing things I think the audience wants, but I'd at least like to know if you were enjoying it for its lampooning of a weak story or if you'd like it even if I put up one of my favorite stories and didn't have a single mean thing to say at all. In other words, what would you rather see: better quality hentai or more snide comments and criticisms?

Either way it's not what I intended this to be perceived as. I just wanted to up something and lazily translate it for folks! But if it's entertaining, sure, I can give it another go, why not.
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>>968822
For me it was real fun to read the critical comment. So I'd say more snide comments and criticism.
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Thank you OP, you should comment on another one.

The only thing that I can see is that she never got broken, hence the no corruption.
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I think it's good to be more discerning about porn. Time is valuable, and I personally feel cheated if I read a hentai manga that promises a particular fetish I enjoy but does not deliver in a satisfying way. It's like being slapped with your own flaccid penis.

In other words, this thread wins.
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>>968775
>wow you can read Japanese? Even so fuck the plot in hentai. They do add a bit of sexiness but still fuck it

I can only speak from my own personal experience, but language is one hell of an aphrodesiac. yes, I can fap to moonspeak hentai... but not as weasily or as powerfully as to something I can actually read. A great example from the /h/ side of things would be Okina's Shining Masume series. fappable in moon, SO MUCH BETTER in english. Even the non-porn parts help by drawing you further in to the story, and by providing emotional grounding for what happens later.

...So when the FUCK is three Angels Short gonna get translated?
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>>966356

Moar originality in porn?
>> who knew one little reply could grow so large Anonymous
>>969940
In the sense that it was cliché, yes, I want more originality. But nobody complains when something well-loved is done to death (e.g. "zomg she turned into a demon haven't seen that before :p"), so my main point was that this has to be one of the DUMBEST ideas in the history of sex.

One man. One penis. Two women. Two vaginas. This problem is "remedied" (like using super glue to restore a tornado-wrecked home's foundation) by one of two means:

1) the women put their vaginas close together and make a "hot dog sandwich" with their vaginas as the bread bun and the guy's penis as the hotdog. But this keeps the guy from penetrating either girl and only allows for clitoral stimulation, something he could have done better with his tongue or fingers. Next.

2) The guy sticks his dick into one of the women's vaginas, leaving the other girl to either wait her turn or be fondled by one of his spare hands. Better than #1, but still a failure of a "solution" because if the woman wants your cock hey guess what -- your right hand is not your penis! (Though the two may share an intimate relationship.)

Even though I know we as manly men are supposed to love the idea of a three-way with 2 girls and 1 guy, I've always found it to be impractical. The girls can't position themselves right, one girl is left out, and (though doujins don't always deal with this) there's the whole psychological can of worms that comes with "How come you didn't pick me first?" or "How come you came inside of her and not me?"

Women, on the other hand, ... they were MADE for the menage à trois. Or fuck that, if the girl likes to use all three holes then she can. One more reason women get to have more fun than us during sex. Fuckin' a.
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>>969954
More fun than men? Get real. What's funny and exciting about man moving back and forth, squealing like pig and thinking the plunging is all it takes for woman to come?
Seriously, if woman has to choose she'd go for the caresing hand instead of penis.
in b4 no females on internet.
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Damn, volume 4 will be out in two days or smth (http://ktcom.jp/book/sh/sh004.htm) with chapter 8 in the Asuka and Shizuru story, and we don't even have volume two and chapter 7.

This is killing me.
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>>969985
Wait, is japan two volumes ahead or two chapters?
this is one of the best doujin i fapped to
>> Anonymous
maybe this was intended to be a sex slave-esque story rather than a coruption story?
I do agree that it's inconsistent about Turning though. Perhaps it takes a few kids first
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>>969954
MFF porn generally disappoints me, but only because I expect to see some girl on girl action. If it has that, well then I'm golden.

Either way though, if I was the guy I sure as hell wouldn't be complaining.
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>>969954

Needs more double cock
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>>969990
I know, it's one of my favorites too.

Japan is three volumes and one chapter ahead.
Rindou completes a chapter every two volumes (just like it was with Tokiryoujoku)
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>three volumes and two chapters ahead

Fix'd.
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>>969971
This argument is grossly invalid because it boils down to a series of outrageous claims: "women don't enjoy penetration period; they only want to be fondled and clitorally stimulated; and if a woman is to be penetrated then that obviously means that the man/men didn't perform any foreplay on her whatsoever; and that men who do perform penetration do so poorly and without consideration of the woman's wants or needs; I should know because I'm a girl; and as one girl I can speak for all women."

Fu. Cking. Outrageous. Get the fuck off our internet -- and take a course on logic before you come back.
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>>969971
There are so many things I could say, but I'll restrict myself to these two.

1. Everything you've written is perfectly in line with what a lesbian, misanthrope, or inexperienced virgin might write; but we're just supposed to take your word for it that not only are you a girl but you are an experienced girl who loves sex with men.

2. We can prove that many women are not content with clitoral stimulation and "caresing [sic] hand[s]" with two simple observations. First, that if women were content with this alone then they would have no need for (and, as you might argue, no desire for) sexual intercourse with men. They wouldn't even have a desire for dildos! They could just sit on the toilet or on their bed at home and fondle themselves silly. Yet we know that most women are not content with this. Which brings us to Observation #2, that most women do seek out male companionship and do not merely permit but rather encourage their men to go the full mile.

Point #2, especially, is what I took issue with in this story. Alice clearly wanted Xanadu's cock inside of her and was not content with meager masturbation or even rubbing against Rachael. Yet despite this demonstrated need the author gave Alice two seconds of Cock Sandwich and then it was all over for her. And *somehow* she still manages to climax more obnoxiously than Rachael.
>> Anonymous
Anon did not get the 'when they have to choose' thing. Show me some woman (not masochist) who enjoys just penis and I'll take your word.
Either you were very lucky or had no intercouse except with your hand.
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>>970205
It's a forced hypothetical because we both know there are common positions for the combination of vaginal penetration with clitoral stimulation just by the actions of the penis.
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/d/ - porn plot discussion